I thought the sentiment of this piece was great, and the structure really worked for the subject matter. The poem was evocative and clear.

No specific suggestions for improvement.

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. Nice work!

I wasn't familiar with the "bop" form before I read this poem, and I have to say that I really enjoyed it! The form is well structured and seems like a fun challenge to try and fit a prompt into. For your poem specifically, I thought the repetition was really nice, and the refrain really pulled the whole piece together, and the overall message of the piece was effectively presented and engaging.

The only small part that stuck out to me were the "it laughs / it cries" lines in the last stanza. Those lines were so brief when compared to the structure and syllable counts of the other lines that I found it jarring to read over lines of such brevity at the cadence that came to be expected from the length of the other lines. Even an extra word or syllable or two would, I think, round that out a bit.

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this item. It was a powerful, entertaining read and I appreciated the opportunity to discover a new poetry form!

I think you did a great job of capturing the swirling emotions that come with suspicion, infidelity, and broken trust. The acute pain of the experience comes through in the writing really clearly.

Some additional context details would be helpful. Based on the way the events are presented, the author is explaining how they feel and what they suspect happen, but no actual confirmation is given. Nervous behavior leads to a defensive "nothing happened" leads to the author saying the relationship is over, but we don't get any sense of how that moment resolved itself. Did the author accuse Pat of lying when Pat said nothing happened? Did Pat confess? Some additional context clues would be helpful to understand the events of the story outside the author's emotional state.

Overall, this was a compelling read. Nice job!

This was a fun take on the prompt, with a really impactful ending. I thought you did a great job telling an engaging story in only a few short words. Nicely done!

No specific suggestions for improvement.

Overall, this was an excellent entry for The Writer's Cramp round it was written for. Great job!

I really liked the brevity of the piece in general, as well as the specificity of the goals that you set for achieving certain things by certain dates.

It would be great to have a little more context for the "why" of certain dates that you selected. For example, why complete "Across America" by March 1? Why is spending quality time with friends specifically five times before February 23? Some additional context for those specifics would be helpful for the reader.

Overall, this was an enjoyable Dear Me letter. I hope you were successful with your various goals!

Your passion in this piece definitely shows through. The writing is strong and confident in tone.

Subject matter-wise, the piece felt a little disjointed. The title implies that the essay will discuss Donald Trump, but then the first two paragraphs are about artificial intelligence, followed by multiple paragraphs about "the left" and it's only at the very end that Trump is mentioned by name or pulled into the thesis of the piece. In this case, if you're happy with the piece itself, it may be a simple matter of selecting a more appropriate title to match the expectations of the piece. Maybe "We need to talk about the current political climate" or "We need to talk about modern society" or something like that, which is more encompassing of all the things you touch on in the essay.

Overall, I enjoyed the read. Nice work!

This poem was really short and to the point, which I thought was a really effective choice, as the brevity adds impact to the whole piece.

No specific suggestions for improvement.

Overall, I really enjoyed this item and thought you did a great job with it. Thanks!

This was a really endearing story with a great message for the reader. I thought it was concise, to the point, and really did a great job of illustrating some of the many ways God can bless our lives. Well done!

No specific suggestions for improvement.

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece.

I enjoyed this poem. In particular, I thought you did a really great job with the structure and the imagery in the piece.

No specific suggestions for improvement.

Overall, this was an enjoyable, well-written poem. I thought you did a good job with it. Well done!

The sentiment of the piece was really great. This vignetted really gets at an important lesson and you presented it in a way that was clear and effective, drawing from a specific circumstance which is very relatable.

The first sentence threw me off a bit. "Her eyes scream at me like truck brakes" is a bit of a mixed simile, where you're comparing a look (visual) with an sound (audio), leading to a bit of a disconnect. Given that it's the introductory sentence that sets the tone for the rest of the piece, I would consider a slightly less complicated or more traditional figure of speech.

Overall, I enjoyed reading this piece and thought you did a good job with it. Well done!

I really enjoyed the imagery and the staccato rhythm of this piece. I also thought it was interesting that you included both a new version and an old version for comparison. For what it's worth, I think the new version is an improvement.

I don't have any particular suggestions for improvement.

Overall, this was a well-written piece that was an enjoyable read. Nicely done!