I thought you did a great job with the imagery and the structure of this piece. It was an easy, effective read and I particularly liked the way you ended with a question to the reader. Nice work!

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Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece.

I think you did a great job making a distinction between the United Kingdom and the separate, distinct countries which comprise Great Britain. A lot of your points are well-taken, and your examples are spot on.

The one area that stuck for me was the following:

"While England is the largest of the countries on the island of Great Britain, and has the largest population, it is not another word for the UK. It would be like referring to the USA as New York, or Texas. The Queen is the Queen of Great Britain and Northern Ireland, not England."

I spent quite a lot of time thinking through whether that was accurate, and while I think it ultimately is, the imperfection of the analogy definitely threw me off. I wonder if a non-governmental example would be a better analogy so you don't get readers hung up like I did on whether, for example, referring to the USA as one of its states, or whether the monarch of a commonwealth is also the monarch of its collection of smaller countries.

Overall, I think this was an effective, persuasive piece of writing. Well done!

I enjoyed reading this piece. I thought it was well-written and you managed to fit a lot of information and detail in a relatively short piece. I thought the dialogue at the end moved the story along nicely to an effective end.

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Overall, I enjoyed reading this. Nice work!

I enjoyed this story. I thought you did a great job capturing a lot of information and detail in comparatively few words, and the dialogue effectively moved the story alone.

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Overall, I thought this was a solid nice. Nice work!

This was a charming story that you did a great job setting up and paying off. I like the fact that you detailed the importance of a sense of humor to defuse situations at the beginning of the story and then brought it around and paid it off at the end of the story. In such a short piece, that's not easy to do. Well done!

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Overall, this was a light, enjoyable story. Well done!

I thought you did a good job with this story. The 300-word flash fiction stories featuring a prompt of multiple keywords that have to be used can be a real challenge sometimes, and I thought you did well incorporating them into the narrative.

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Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. Nice work!

I thought the language in this piece, albeit brief, was really impactful and visceral. You did a great job of capturing a feeling and a vivid sense of emotion in comparatively few words. Nice work!

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Overall, I really enjoyed this piece. Well done!

This was an entertaining, engaging vignette that captures the spark of a moment between two people. I like the simplicity of the piece, and the directness with which it was presented.

I was hoping for a bit more in the way of character development, to help the reader understand what it is about Ed and Samuel's connection that is so captivating that it would make them consider a spontaneous trip to London. I think it bit more development of the characters would help make the appeal of the situation even greater.

Overall, I think you're off to a great start with this piece. Well done!

I thought you did a really great job with this poem. The visual language is excellent, and your imagery paints a vibrant image for the reader. I thought the internal structure of the lines was good as well.

Personally, I would love to have a little white space / line separation to break the poem up a little and give the reader a visual break on the page, but that's a relatively small quibble with an otherwise excellent poem.

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece. Well done!

I really enjoyed your item. I thought it was a great reminder of how important memories are to us, and how devastating it can be to suffer from an affliction like Alzheimer's which steals those memories. Nice work!

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Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece. Well done!

I like the positive message you convey in this piece, about being fiscally responsible and finding value in the simple things. You did a great job of including just enough details to paint a vivid picture without weighing down the narrative.

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Overall, I think you did a great job with this piece. Well done!

I really enjoyed the detail and description in this piece. The interactions between the characters were natural and flowed well, and contrasted nicely with the vivid description. Well done!

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Overall, this was a very entertaining read. Nice work!

I really enjoyed the imagery in this piece. I thought you did a great job conveying some really vivid details in comparatively few works. Nice job!

Some of the lines felt like they went on a little long, with multiple pauses and sections, which gave the structure a bit of a run-on feel at times. If you were looking to revise this piece, you might want to play around with the line breaks a little to experiment with different structures and pacing.

Overall, this was an enjoyable read and you're off to a great start with it. Well done!

I thought you did a great job of capturing the emotions of the situation in this poem. My wife works with students who have special needs and from what she's told me, this seems like a really accurate and vivid explanation for the experiences of someone with inattentive-type ADHD. Nice work!

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Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece. Well done!

I liked the setup for the piece. It was quick and to the point, and easily established the potential for a much larger story.

Ultimately, the setup is the only thing presented in this piece, and I was hoping for a little more about what happens after the characters introduce themselves to one another. The story that comes from this setup hasn't been told yet, and I'd love to see where it goes.

Overall, I thought this was a good intro to a larger story.

This poem was short and simple, but packed a punch. I particularly liked the structure and the way you ended the last two stanzas with questions for the reader. Nice work!

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I thought you did a good job with this piece. Well done!

I really liked the structure and the story you tell in this piece. I can definitely imagine it being set to music and being a really impactful song. Nice job!

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Overall, I enjoyed the read and thought you did a good job with these song lyrics. Well done!

I thought this was a sweet, short poem about the boy you first loved. The structure was excellent and it was a quick, easy read. Nice work!

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Overall, I enjoyed the read and thought you did a great job with it. Well done!

I really liked the surprise twist at the end of this story. It caught me off-guard and definitely kept me thinking about the story even after it was over.

I think a thorough proofread would help round out the piece a little, as there were several spelling/grammatical errors. I also think the ending would be just a little bit stronger if you ended on the "we don't have any male nurses on this floor" line as the very last line, rather then the penultimate line with an additional bit of dialogue after it.

Overall, this was an entertaining read. Nice job!

I liked the structure and organization of this piece. In addition to a poem, it feels like it was almost structured as a mantra or a prayer that could be repeated daily or whenever the reader needs a reminder of what God is capable of. Nice work!

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Overall, I thought this was a good piece. Well done!

I really like the message of this piece. I think too many people are concerned with never making mistakes or being perfect, and the lesson you present at the end, of using mistakes as a source of wisdom and learning something from them is a lesson we should all take to heart when things don't quite go according to plan. We often learn more from our mistakes than we do from the things we do right!

From a technical standpoint, the piece felt a little unfocused. It starts with an anecdote about brushing your teeth with pain gel rather than toothpaste and missing a train (i.e., an unfortunate but relatively innocuous circumstance), and then specifically say that "making mistakes might be one of your strengths."

But the examples that come after (not telling your mother that you got in trouble at school and then losing your passport on an international trip) where the lessons learned are kind of very quickly summarized at the end as "don't blindside people" and "own your mistakes." While the overall point of the piece (embrace your mistakes and learn from them) is well-taken, it felt like a common throughline to these mistakes was missing, which led to the disjointed feeling where the theme of the piece is clear, but it's less clear how these three mistakes specifically tie together and why you chose them instead of other more thematically connective mistakes.

Overall, I think you're off to a good start here. You include a bit of humor to offset the serious tone of some of the concerns, and your writing style is casual and friendly. I think there's some room for refinement, but otherwise this was a very enjoyable read. Nice work!

Nice job on this poem. I thought the message was great, and you structured everything really well. It was a solid read. Nice work!

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Overall, I liked this piece a lot, and thought you did a good job with it. Well done!

I really enjoyed the imagery in this piece. I thought you did a great job painting a vivid picture in each stanza, with each stanza contributing to the larger whole. Nice work!

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Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece. Well done!

I think you have a good setup for a story here. The palace intrigue about how the "evil queen" character comes into powerful is interesting and a great lead-in to a story proper.

Some of the details of Naomi's reasoning (and the kingdom's rules) are a little unclear. Why does Nathaniel have to die in order for Naomi to take power? It's just kind of assumed that Nathaniel has to die in order for her to gain the throne, but most monarchies in the world have processes for abdication (or other disposition of the throne) and entire succession plans built around who the next person in line would be to the throne. It felt a bit like the mechanics of how Naomi took the throne weren't fully developed... and it could be as easy a fix as Naomi just not wanting any option other than Nathaniel's death. Maybe he offers to abdicate but she says she doesn't want any loose ends out in the world or something like that?

I think the fact that Nathaniel still wants out of the responsibility after his parents' deaths is what makes this difficult. It would almost make more sense for him to take his obligations as the new king seriously (to honor his parents), and then, when Naomi threatens him, he refuses to abdicate, so then Naomi feels like she has to kill him.

Overall, I think you're off to a good start with this story. Nice job!

I like the disjointed feeling of reading this poem; I think you did a great job using the structure to reflect the sentiment trying to be expressed.

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Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. I always enjoy it when a poem's form also enhances its function, and you did that really well. Nice work!