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I believe in constructive criticism and honesty. I can adapt my review style to fit the kind of feedback an author is looking for (e.g., developmental suggestions, fine-tuning, proofreading, etc.), but will always try to be as encouraging and helpful as possible.
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Plotting, characterization, dialogue, structure/pacing, and professional considerations. I can also do serviceable technical editing/proofreading, but I'm much better with developmental/creative feedback.
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I read almost everything. I particularly love genre fiction (mystery/thriller and science fiction/fantasy especially) and nonfiction of all kinds.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Positives

I really enjoy this form of poetry, and I think you did a good job fitting a complete sentiment inside a very restrictive form. It's not easy to manipulate a form this specific. Nice work!


Suggestions

No suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I think you did a great job with this piece. Well done!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Positives

I thought the language and the visual imagery in this piece was really impressive. Your use of detail painted a vibrant picture for the reader despite the brevity of the piece. Nice job!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this item. Well done!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Positives

This was a short, entertaining piece. I thought you did a great job with the structure, and capturing the fun of visiting someone's port here on WdC.


Suggestions

Given the breadth of material people are writing about here on the site, I think you could easily expand the content of this piece and find rhymes for checking people's ports for stories, poems, etc.


Overall

Overall, this was a great piece. Nicely done!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Positives

I really enjoyed the amount of story you were able to fit into a story of less than 500 words. Especially toward the end, you managed to tell a lot of narrative in a short span of time.


Suggestions

No specific suggestions.


Overall

Overall, I thought this was a good piece. Well done!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Positives

I thought this was a fun, lighthearted piece that was quite enjoyable to read. I can't say I share the same affinity for shopping that you do, but your passion for the pastime definitely shines through in this piece. Well done!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece. Nice job!


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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Positives

I loved the twist at the end of this flash fiction story. You did a great job conveying a compelling story in just a couple hundred words, which is not easy to do. Well done!


Suggestions

The narrative where the protagonist seemed to be having an inner monologue with the reader in the first paragraph (where he wonders if the psychiatrist thinks he's even crazier than he himself does, and then the protagonist calmly discusses believing in vampires) undercuts the emotion of the rest of the piece, where the protagonist is fired up about this issue and borderline irrational. I would stick to one or the other (either logical or irrational) to avoid conflicting messaging in the story.


Overall

Overall, this was a short, fun read. Nice work!


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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Positives

The characterization in this story was excellent; you really captured a lot of personality and nuance in a fairly short narrative. Nicely done!


Suggestions

No suggestions.


Overall

I'm sorry to hear about the passing of Purdy so shortly after this piece was written, but I think it's a lovely tribute to her. Great job!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Positives

I really liked the structure of this piece. The rhyme scheme had an almost lyrical quality to it, and the pace of the read was quick and snappy. Nice work!


Suggestions

I don't have any specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a really good job with this piece. Well done!


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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Positives

I thought the structure and the imagery in this piece was really good. The poem was articulate and visceral and vivid in its description.


Suggestions

No specific suggestions that I can think of.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. Well done!


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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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Positives

I liked the sentiment of this piece. I thought you did a great job capturing the feeling of loss and the determination to keep a loved one in your memory at the years march on. Nice work!


Suggestions

One typo I noticed: You're gone so it will one day win...


Overall

Overall, I enjoyed the read. Well done!


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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
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Positives

I thought you did a great job with the description and the detail in this story. It was really visceral and easy to imagine. Nice job!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions that I could think of.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. Good work!


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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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Positives

You did a great job with the pacing and the atmosphere in this piece. It was creepy and thrilling, which is the hallmark of a good suspense/thriller story. Nice work!


Suggestions

The logistics of what happened were a little confusing for me. Jim went into the back room and took a nap so he didn't notice in the camera feed when "the old man at the counter dropped to the floor like a sack of flour." When he wakes up to close the store, he runs into the stranger, and sees the dead guy at the counter ... and then does "a double-take around the store where he saw the other patrons from hours earlier littered in the aisles he could see from the front. All lying lifeless on the floor."

But then at the end of the story, we realize the stranger is a girl who's there to kill Jim specifically for something he did in the past. Did she come into the store and murder all of the patrons just because? Were they connected to Jim as well? Was what happened with the old man's fall against the counter an accident, or was that also the girl? If that was the girl, she killed everyone, then hung out in the store, standing there for two hours while Jim took a nap?

Some additional clarity on how the events play out moment-by-moment would be helpful to increase the tension of the story.


Overall

Overall, I think you're off to a great start with this story. Well done!


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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Positives

This was a really touching, emotional story. You did a great job of communicating a lot of resonant feelings in comparatively few words, through the medium of (mostly) dialogue. Well done!


Suggestions

I had a hard time understanding why James expected his sister to mail off his college application, or why she didn't do it. I know that's incidental to the larger point of the story, but it seemed like a very specific example, but without the benefit of specific details to better understand the "how" of what happened.


Overall

Overall, I think you're off to a great start with this piece. Well done!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Positives

The structure of this piece was really nice, and you did a great job of communicating a complete and interesting perspective in comparatively few words. Good job!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I like the fact that this piece was simple, well structured, and still managed to communicate a clear perspective. Nice work!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Positives

I thought you did a great job with the characterization of dreaming as the same kind of affliction as any other addition; that was a really original and unique take on a familiar subject. Nice work!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I think you did a great job with this piece. Well done!


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Review of Woven in the Dark  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hi C.W. Rickman

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Positives

The letter from Mirabelle to Eirwyn feels familiar and comfortable, as if written by two people very familiar with one another. I liked the informality and the sense of relationship, and it really helped anchor this piece.


Suggestions

As someone who's coming into this worldbuilding fresh, it felt a bit much all at once, and a little overly-expository. In the span of less than 1,000 words, we're introduced to seven named characters (Mirabelle, Eirwyn, Cassius, Belenus, Rowan, Gosse, Clementine), plus an additional five worldbuilding concepts (Enchanters, The Order, Laurentinus, Ariels, The True World) which aren't given a lot of explanation or context. And while those details do add an element of authenticity to the letter itself and it's point of view, it's a bit confusing for an outside reader who has no knowledge of these things. Presumably, they will be explained later in the story proper, but it made the prologue a little less engaging than it otherwise would have, not knowing anything about The Order, or whether the "protection of the Ariels" is significant or not, etc.


Overall

Overall, I think you've got a great starting point for a prologue (and a larger story) here. You clearly have an entire narrative backstory and setting laid out, which is really commendable. I would recommend focusing this prologue on a more digestible moment with less exposition for the benefit of the reader, and then letting some of those other elements and characters reveal themselves in time. But I think you're off to a great start!


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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
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*Train* Positives

I really enjoyed the mythology you infused in this piece, and I think the simple structure of short, repeating rhyming lines in every stanza was an effective way to communicate so much narrative is so comparatively few words. Well done!


*Train* Suggestions

For me, some of the lines felt a little abrupt, which I think is probably due to the degree of difficulty you took on in both telling an "epic" mythological tale while also trying to restrict your presentation to only rhymed lines in triplets. I don't think there were any lines that just straight-up didn't work for me, but there were a handful where I thought the read was rather abrupt (e.g., "away he went / to find a tent / perhaps to rent", versus some of the more expansive lines).


*Train* Overall

Overall, I think you did a really good job with this piece considering the difficulty of the thing that you attempted. With a little fine-tuning, this could be a really exceptional piece, and a great example of storytelling in the style of the epic poem classics from the Greeks. Nice job! *Smile*


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tim Chiu

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Positives

I really liked the message of this piece, and the way is was presented. There was an eloquence to the piece that I appreciated.


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement that I could find.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece. Nice work!


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Hi 🌖 HuntersMoon

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Positives

It's always a pleasure to have the opportunity to review one of your poems, and this piece is certainly no exception. I really like the way you structured this piece and the homage to "The Birds." Well done!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

As always, your poetry is top notch. Keep up the good work!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Sum1

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Positives

I thought you did a great job with this piece. The sentiment and the structure were both great, and it was an easy, affecting read. Well done!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this poem. Good work!


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Hi Ginger44

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Positives

The execution of this poem was great. I really liked the underlying sentiment, and the short, efficient structure really helped to drive things home in an impactful way.


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this poem. Well done!


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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Mary Ann MCPhedran

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Positives

I enjoyed reading this item. I thought you did a great job telling the story in a concise and clear way, making it easy for the reader to follow along.


Suggestions

A bit more context leading into the job search would help set the stage a little more, I think, but otherwise this was an enjoyable read.


Overall

You did a solid job with this. Nice work!


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Hi Happy to write

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Positives

You did a really great job with the sentiment and the message in this piece. I think it's a lovely dedication to your son's birth and something that I'm sure he'll be very touched by when he's old enough to appreciate the creativity that went into writing something like this for him.


Suggestions

For me, the second line needs some kind of punctuation between "You were easy to love" and "I didn't hesitate" to break up the two discrete thoughts. I also find myself wondering what the hesitation relates to. Was it hesitation with the idea of having children at all? With the idea of keeping a child, or with the process of giving birth? Some additional context would be helpful to fully understand the hesitation that you were not struggling with (that presumably other people do).


Overall

Overall, this was a delightful poem that was short, concise, and effectively communicated your love for your child. Well done!


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Amethyst Angel 🌼

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*ButtonPlay* Positives

Well, you certainly win the award for the most ambitious anthology project of the bunch! *Bigsmile* You managed to write a half dozen more short stories than the next largest collection, AND all of your stories took full advantage of the word count! *Shock2*

I really loved the pure variety in the stories you wrote, taking on genres as diverse as crime and fantasy, and dealing with topics everywhere from friendship to philosophy. I'm really impressed by what you were able to accomplish with this collection.


*ButtonPlay* Suggestions

I really don't have any suggestions for improvement. Great job!


*ButtonPlay* Overall

Overall, I loved your entry in the contest this year. It's exactly what I hope for as a judge of this contest. Excellent work!



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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi Purple Catching Up

Thank you for taking the time to enter the 2024 Edition of "Musicology AnthologyOpen in new Window.. Enclosed please find the following review, for your consideration.


*ButtonPlay* Positives

I enjoyed the individual stories that you wrote for this anthology. I wasn't surprised to find that each story had your trademark flair for character dynamics that made each installment feel realistic and engaging. I also loved your choice of album and the amount of information you provided in why you chose it.


*ButtonPlay* Suggestions

For me, many of the stories felt a little vignette-like, due to their brevity. There's nothing wrong with flash fiction, but the way some of the stories played out, they felt more like standalone scenes rather than complete stories that fully played out with a beginning, middle, and end.


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Overall, I thoroughly enjoyed your short story collection this year. It was well written, easy to read, and very entertaining. Nice work!



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