You get a 4.5, (five is for a perfect work and thusly I do not give fives). Great character descriptions. What was important was the sentiment you managed to create. Every word held emotional value making me thouroughly enjoy this story. I like to give everyone suggestions, and for this mine would be to write more like it. I didn't give it a five because of two things, each amounting to half a point. One is personal, preference, something I don't hold you responsible for. I don't have a particular interest in the subject of the writing and could only honestly give you a five if I did. The second is expressiveness. You didn't use much variation in the way you described things, all very straight-forward. I will officially rate it as a 4.5, because I don't want to affect your rating with personal preference. The rating of a 4 is how I see your work with all factors included. If you think I am unfairly judging your work, message me.
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