That was you?!?! How have you been?…Sorry, I couldn’t resist. The unpleasantness of the story comes through loud and clear. I think next time you might want to check to see if the ladies room has an escape window. The only thing I think you should add is your feelings of uneasiness. It is implied, but your writing is so well done on descriptions, it would add even more to a good read. Thanks for sharing it.
Driving back from Alabama to New Jersey this weekend a persistent rattle lurking someplace in the dash drove me nuts. Speed up, slow down, press on the vents, press on the buttons, who the hell knows where it was coming from. Lord knows this story flashed through my mind. We all have personal gremlins that seem to like nothing else in life but to giggle in a corner while we try to find them making annoying noises. Thanks for the story!
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