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#4314672

Review of Twisted

Review by JA

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

I like it. It's a very easy read. The rhythm is good. It falters in a few spots, but that in no way takes away from the poem. The flow could be tightened up a bit, but I'm not sure I would mess it. The read on this is good.

I love the line, "No, I'm not dead; My mind has just drifted. I can't help that I'm so sick and twisted."

Great line.

Keep on bringing it, I would love to read more.

Ja Sibley

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#4314665

Review of The Passage

Review by JA

Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

This is wonderful. Your tale of being on the road with your dad and family. It's priceless. I could see myself looking at the mountains. Having a snack with Dad, just us.
You did a great job. I didn't find any grammar errors, the story flowed wonderfully.
I smiled all the way through and laughed at getting the hit meant for a sibling. I been there.

Good job, keep it coming.
Ja Sibley

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#4314413

Review of Beneath the Tree

Review by JA

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

This is a nice, dark poem. The AABB is spot on. Rhythm and Rhyme flow through easily and make this an easy read.

I could easily, in my minds eye, see the guy as he tortured this poor girl and left her for no one to find.

Great job on the overall.

Keep on writing,
Ja Sibley

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#4312854

Review of Location! Location! Location!

Review by JA

Rated: E

| (5.0)

I love this.
I have written in the normal, at the table, my home office, sitting on the couch. But for the weirder at heart... I write in the car on road trips, I write poolside, enjoying the sun. Camping in the woods, but the oddest was when I did some of my best writing in a bar as my hubby played with the band. The hubby is singer, songwriter of the blues. I sat at the end of the bar and wrote all night long.

The odd places that bring out the muse.
Ja

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#4311579

Review of Butterflies Die

Review by JA

Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

Very well done. I wouldn't change a thing.

This is a well done poem with spot on AABB approach. As I read this, I could feel the child's pain.

I believe for a writer to write with heart and feeling, one must have either seen this pain or been a part of the pain growing up.

Your insight is deeply touching.

Thank you for the beautiful poem.

JA Sibley

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#4311350

Review of You can take this job....

Review by JA

Rated: E

| (4.0)

Oh my gosh. You been reading my diary! lol I can so relate to this from start to finish and I'm not a waitress. This works for all jobs. I've had bosses like this one and I have stopped and said "I quit."

Excellent painting of a wonderful picture of life on a daily basis.

JA Sibley