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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This a really great, current topic, and something that I have had several friends cry on my shoulder about. Are you planning on expanding on it? Great job on establishing the rocky relationship between Lily and her Father. One thing I would suggest is taking out/editing some of the obvious explanations of things that can inferred by the reader - such as the 'secret relationship', her clumsiness, and being Catholic.
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