Iva Marie's (iva333) Reviews

Iva Marie

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32 Public Reviews Given

32 Total Reviews Given

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#4188848

Review of Black of Night

Review by Iva Marie

Rated: E

| (3.5)

I love the scene, but the flow was difficult to follow because of the punctuation.
If written in stanza I might have been able to follow better.

But again, I love the scene you painted.

Iva

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#4172771

Review of Lies

Review by Iva Marie

Rated: E

| (4.0)

Certainly a poem we can all identify with. It flowed nicely.

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#4172655

Review of Dark Alliance

Review by Iva Marie

Rated: E

| (3.0)

For some reason I struggled with ambiguous.

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#4172654

Review of Writing Prompt

Review by Iva Marie

Rated: E

| (5.0)

Happens.

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#4172638

Review of Not gone, but forgotten.

Review by Iva Marie

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

You have great flow and an important message. Here are some corrections and suggestions. Keep writing.

1. They have no idea the pain "you're" in

2. Remember it happens to all of us

3. Lose the 2nd "Remember"

4. But our mental health has paid the price.

Also I don't think "that" and "twat" rhyme the way you hoped.

I like this. My husband and I are Veterans and my son-in-law has completed Iraq and Afghanistan tours. People need to hear more about what you can share.

Peace

Iva Marie

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#4171304

Review of Almost Over

Review by Iva Marie

Rated: E

| (4.0)

That was a fun read to the end of the holiday event. One we can all relate to.

Thanks for sharing. One punctuation correction, did you want a period after the second line "witches."?

Have a good day!

Iva Marie

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#4170695

Review of THE POEM

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

That was such a fun read. It flowed nicely, and made me smile. Thanks for sharing. Keep feeing the poem.

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#4170231

Review of For those who serve and those who wait

Review by Iva Marie

Rated: E

| (5.0)

Thank you. Your words shared both the pain of the soldier and the families that love them. It flowed nicely and connected with clarity. As a Veteran, and a mother with a son-in-law in the Armed Forces, the pain of the military life is all to clear. You described it beautifully.

Peace

Iva Marie

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#4170200

Review of Stuck!

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Rated: E

| (3.5)

The second half of the poem really flowed for me. I could sense the pressure building in your words.

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#4169868

Review of THE PLACE OF IN-BETWEEN

Review by Iva Marie

Rated: E

| (5.0)

You painted a very clear picture of how so many people feel. I could relate, and I appreciated how you expressed it.