was really thought out. not alot of errors. my only thing is for those who have never played mass effect before and have no idea what a turian or quarian looks like. so might want to describe that. if your planning on redoing anything anytime soon :)
i will say i like the way the story is going. but.. ik you are a great writer and all, but plz add more detail, what do the colonists look like? are they human? or some form of alien race? and if so do they have tentacles? im not here to criticize. just to say my view. like i said. the plot has potential. i am looking forward to reading more.
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