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Rated: E | (3.0)
Mine either.
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
I would eliminate the telling segment, beginning with 'You'll know soon enough' and ending with 'I cannot'.

This passage jerked me out of the moment because it came across as an info dump. I assumed the condemned already knew the reason for their sentence. If not, then why the poisoned tea?

But that's just me.

Overall, an entertaining short.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wow, this is great. Love the perspective.

This is the first chapter I've read...has his father passed and he doesn't realize it?
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Review of Pool of Humanity  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Nice 👍
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Actually I, and a few hundred others, saw something large hovering and still in the sky one night in the late 90's. No photo was ever produced and Fort Drum claimed not to have seen anything on their radar. 911 blew up with calls, though...
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Review of The Missing Arm  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Okay, I'm smiling here.

A nice short humorous piece.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Creepy and funny.

Neat how you had me thinking it was a man cutting down a tree and then whap! - flinging ME into the opposite scenario.

Well done.
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Review of Dream  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
From your pen to my heart.
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Review of True innocence  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Is this a retelling of an Indian folktale?

It's a fine story, finely told.
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Review of Cheesy.  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
OMG!
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Is this a scene from a longer tale? If so, you have me hooked.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Nice! The last few poems I've read here have been fantastic, including this one.
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Review of In the Garden  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Excellent!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a fiver -- any poem that almost brings me to tears deserves it.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Nice -- the hope that lust and love are one.

Only time will tell...

Enjoyed this piece.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Interesting metaphors. Well written, though I would have liked a bit more.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Like the way you set this up then laid it out.

An admirable narrative.
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Review of Big Bang  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is both funny and great!
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Your writing is crisp and clear, your frustration palpable. It's just the apex of the piece I'm struggling with.

Bungie jumping, sky diving, zip lining usually involves someone else who's working so you can enjoy yourself, doesn't it? Maybe they don't consider their jobs productive to society,either.

Aside from the logic issue with this piece I consider you an excellent writer. I would definitely like to see more of your work.
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Review of Two Together  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Kudos to your cheekiness!
Nice job!
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Review of Dog onna Bog  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow!
I'm a fan!
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Review of Memories  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Lovely
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hear,hear! Every soul is equal,no matter the vessel it occupies.
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Review of The Tree Sap  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Wow,nice. I can see them.
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Review of A Duo Of Demons  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Ooh! Really liked this.
Only thing I'd change is to delete -- the little snot nosed demon whispered in a high pitched voice -- you don't need it.
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