I work with children 5 and younger diagnosed or demonstrate signs/symptoms of ASD. If you have any suggestions for teaching children with aggressive behaviors or even how to support their family, I am open to anything.
I got a comedic tone from your poem, which I loved. Some days are just to crazy and full of irony that you jist need to laugh it off. The words had an excellent rhyming scheme and beat which just made me think that if I were in the narrators shoes I would have thrown the towel and yelled I gove up. Thank you for writing and thank you for sharing.
I really loved how you arranged your poem. It really added to the disorganized thought and the lack of connection associated with dissociation disorder. The fact that it was broken up in a non linear progression offered a visual level of the associated emotions communicated in your poem. Thank you for sharing!
The poem was very fluid and contained a well developed catchy rhythm.
What I liked about the poem: It is honest about how the narrator assumes he/she is judged and reflected upon by the older generation. It challenges social assumptions about a younger generation relative to the generation being addressed in the poem. It also questions why they are subject to ridicule by soul appearance when they believe themselves to be harmless. I remember feeling this way as a teenager.
What I hope for the writer: That the writer will consider the perspective of those judging. How can it affect character and how can the writer use this in writing? What else does the narrator need to know in order to understand the judgements?
Questions that this poem inspires: What can we learn about the perspective of each generation and how they see others? Is it healthy for younger generations to push the social conventions? What would happen if each generation had a spokesperson to represent the conflicting opinions? Has the narrator experienced judgement upon another generation? How will the narrator feel when they are a generation away and is the one making assumptions? Is it always wrong to make these assumptions about a group of people or is it part of survival for those with experience?
I think there is a lot of inspiration within the poem and a lot could be inspired from it. Well written and goodluck!
Hi, I came across your poem as I was looking at the competition. I just wanted to say thank you for writing. It has beautiful rhythm, language, and imagery that was very touching. I am putting it in my favorites. Goodluck in this round!
I love Ireland. I wish I could say I am Irish but alas I am not. However, your poem brought a smile to my face as I envisioned the calming roll of the hills covered in green. Thanks for writing!
I think I know how you feel. I hate setting goals actually. I have a horrible time listening to self-help books though, because I have never felt like I can fit the mold of what they can consider the avenue of success. Perhaps you have been there? I really think your analogy of no u-turns is well stated, but as always, easier said than done. I find that I have trouble picturing myself in success. Though I love traveling, I am very rooted in the familiarity and safety of my family and friends at home. As soon as I start thinking of all the points I need to do to reach the point I want, it becomes overwhelming. Some people appreciate building the forest one tree at a time.... I just want to plant the forest without considering the individual trees and so that I can start exploring all the possibilities within the forest. Does that make sense? I wish I could give you advice on how to achieve the goals you want without starting to doubt yourself, but I can't. The baby steps are hard, and if I have assumed correctly, you are a big picture person, not specifically a detail. At least, that is why goal setting is hard for me. However, I can say your piece was well written and easy to identify with, even for those who may not feel that way... At least I believe I understand and can relate to what you expressed. Good luck and if I come up with an answer, I will share:)
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