Overall I liked it. As a pet lover myself, I could relate to the devotional.
I did see areas that could be tweaked. Like I said the story is good. A couple of spelling errors and maybe a weak verb here or there that could be substituted with a strong verb in places. The spelling errors even looked unintentional; typing to fast.
I like how you summed up the story at the end with the lesson. The only other way I could see it to tweak it would be to add scripture to your story. Maybe, when the truck ran over Butterball and you mentioned you and your family prayed for him and the prayer was answered. Maybe somehow fit Psalm 17 (6) says "I call on you, my God for you will answer me;turn your ear to me and hear my prayer..."as I pray for the healing of my devoted friend and family member, Butterball. Lay you healing hands upon him. In your name I pray Amen. And God answered our prayers Ezra 8 (23) "So we fasted and petitioned our God about this, and he answered our prayer."
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