This is so true. The elderly have so much to offer and some cultures realize that. Our society is beginning to appreciate old people more now that
the baby boomers are retiring. You said this well.
Pegasus
You put this so well.The sub culture ruled by arrogant populars destroys so many special people.
And as you said , they don't make it in the real world.
Good work.
Pegasus
I thought this was very creative.I liked it a lot. The only thing that bothered me was the spelling mistakes. They are like speed bumps on the interstate. Just when the reader is on a roll he hits a bump in the form of a word like to instead of too. It's a small thing but it is disruptive to the nice flow of your work .
pegasus
I liked the exposure of the softer feelings of the
men.You are on the right track.This piece is not like any other I have read.The point of view is unique.
Keep writing.
Pegasus.
I think this piece could very well apply to me too.Thankyou for putting these feelings into words.
That is what makes poetry so special.It speaks out and says what a person might not be able to express for themselves.Thankyou for your kind comments on my short story "The Outer Inn"too.
Pegasus
Oh my word! This is a truly amazing piece.I hope this doesn't go unnoticed .Not only is this excellent writing but it is a masterpiece in form.."The soul's currency"
is so intriguing to me that I must write a poem with that as a jumping off place.Not only have you entertained and made me think but you have inspired as well.
Just wonderful!
Pegasus
Good development of character.I liked the strong
depiction of Jakkon.I think this character could carry a number of adventures easily.This seemed to flow easily for you.It makes me want to try a story of this genre.
Pegasus
I could not improve on this .Beauty lies in every line.
You may be new to this site but you are an old soul when it comes to expressing the purest of images for your reader.How could you improve ?I am pleased with this endeavor.You must ask another for I would not presume.
Pegasus
THIS IS SO WELL DONE YOU FORGET THAT IT IS METHOD WRITING.Being an artist myself I especially enjoyed the line about "a painter's rage"
Science fiction allows the mind to expand to any
idea.Oliver Wendel Holmes once said "Man's mind when expanded to encompass a new idea ,never returns to it's original dimension."This is a good example of mind expansion.
Pegasus
This is so cool!Everything about it is exciting and fast paced.Never a dull moment of excess verbage.
You really have the heart of the Bard my friend.
Makes me think of Autolycus ,the king of thieves on Xena.
The ending was the best.
Quick resolution and a cliff hanger to boot.
Well done!
Pegasus
K ind are the spirits of all,that's the best part to me.I enjoyed this piece very much.great work.
I just joined and I will be looking for your work from now on. Pegasus
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