DISCLAIMER: I am not a professional editor nor a genius writer. I review based on opinion and general observation. I cannot and do not claim to be able to turn your writing into literary art On the the review -
This is precisely why I very seldom eat canned prepared food.
First Impression: A very entertaining tale of a gentlemen that revolutionized Hormel's spicing practices.
I found the writing style well suited to the story.
Technical: There are a few rough spots in the first two paragraphs, I had to go back and reread a few sentences. Once I was through the intro- it was a smooth read.
Overall Impression: I liked it. I remember the Tylenol scare, so I could relate to the piece. It made laugh during the question and answer portion and the involvement of the FBI. -- And the laughter gave me a reason to rate higher....
Side Note: I may not know what's in canned chicken soup, but I can tell you, I wouldn't touch a can of tuna.
I was just poking around and happened upon your wonderful story. This is fabulous, it captures the moment, and transports the reader to the time and place of the event.
You have an excellent way of describing the setting without overkill. I wanted to continue to read. No slow paragraphs every detail you disclosed is necessary to tell the tale.
I will go on to chapter 2 anticipating how the events play out. You have hooked me.
TECHNICAL: Nothing to report. The story flows, no confusion on characters, setting or plot.
OVERALL IMPRESSION: Strong storyline, -- although I don't yet know the details of your characters -- your introduction gives me more than enough to want to get to know every detail as the plot unfolds.
Very well written, very well organized and a superb writing style. Not a big help, but I have no suggestions for improvement.
Thank you for sharing, and I am looking forward to reading more as your tale unfolds.
I thank you for the review- and return the favor by providing one for you
Disclaimer: I am not a professional editor, nor a writing genius. I review based on opinion and general observation. I do not claim to be able to make your writing into literary art
First Impression: I enjoyed it, it made me laugh. You did a great job of bringing personality to the piece
Technical: Nothing to report here -- perfect meter and rhyme scheme.
Overall: A great take on planets, non-planets and their inhabitants. Even going as far as admitting the arrogance of Earthlings. I throughly enjoyed the piece from beginning to end, and am looking forward to reading more of your work.
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