Good, overall. Some constructive criticism: the title may have been a little off, since the poem was mainly about a break up of some sort and not about when the days were good. The rhyming was a bit awkward at times, as rhyming often is, perhaps un-rhymed verse would do better. The flow was fine, but I was a bit lost in places. Just the humble opinion of this reviewer. Keep it up. Feel free to rain your valued criticism on my pathetic work :)
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