This kept my attention all the way through. I loved how detailed the story was and how you really felt like we were in the narrators head. I enjoyed the end. I think this short story will hit home with anyone who finds themselves in a rut.
I thought the poem flowed very well. I'm an elementary teacher so I'm bothered when poems don't rhyme, but I liked hoe this poem was constructed. The end was the best part. I love how it went full circle. Well done!
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