I loved this story!!!
I was on the edge of my seat that entire last part, which I did not see coming at all, by the way.
I can not wait to read more. Ilove this time period and thought you did an excellent job capturing it. I love your detail and could picture everything very vividly. Great job! Keep it up!
I totally understand what you're saying. I've been there, and I know exactly what you mean when you say
"Sorry to disappoint you
This is me, this is me
This is what I do"
And
"Inside, I know, I'm trying to heal
This is me, this is me
Don't tell me how I should feel"
I see myself in this song, I can relate amazingly. I love it. You have conveyed this very personal, and scary experience incredably well. Wonderful job!
Absolutely wonderful!!! It really makes oyu think about that moment, I loved your humor at the end with Krishna and Anibus! That was great! I absolutely loved this piece. Keep it up, you have talent!
I loved this! The begining was a bit slow, but then everything got very exciting. I'm left thinking "What happened next?!" I am hooked, and I'm sure others will be, too. Like I said, the begining was a bit slow... But in all honesty it was necessary of you to esstablish character, and the begining did accomplish that very well. Great job! You are very talented. Keep on writing!
Min
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