I am rating this piece down because of a few mistakes.
First stanza last line 'ahs' I believe should be 'has'.
Third stanza third line 'Not' should be 'Now'.
Fourth stanza second line Lord should have a capital L.
I think this was a wonderful piece. I enjoyed reading it. Many more should read it. All christians should pray for that guidance and strength that we can only get from the Lord God Himself.
Thanks for sharing. Good read!
Redneck Cowgirl
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I am rating this piece a 4.5 because of a few mistakes.
I believe that about the fifth line down "week" should be---->weak.
The eighth line down "the" should be------->thee.
I did like this poem. We should all realize that God is with us no matter even when we doubt him he is there carrying us through the troubles and trials that this old world throws at us.
Good read.
Redneck Cowgirl
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This piece is very facinating piece. I think it is creative. Was this for a contest or did you just think of it? You have encouraged me with this piece to research the air conditioner. I know it is very important in my life, but it is something we just take for granit. Something that would be cool is add on or write another piece that goes along with it, a sequel and put something like so many years the people took it for granit or enjoyed it. Just come up with a story about how we use it so much today. That would be cool. Tell me if you decide to do that.
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I did not see any mistakes.
But I just read it and skimmed through it so that don't mean I didn't miss something although I wish I had so it would have shown I did something.
That was wonderful. I never thought of that...one winged angels...we are all one winged angels, the when we die and if our souls are good, then we get our other wing. I understand...I never thought of that untill I read the title, but that is very very true. Thanks for such a wonderful and fulfilling, I believe lyric.
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