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Review by HelloDalek Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
I really like the idea behind this poem, however I would like to point out that the use of grammar leaves something to be desired. i.e.
"I was prey for you're love,
who bestowed it's beauty on me when you're eyes,
fell upon mine."
Should be;
I was prey for your love,
Who bestowed its beauty on me when your eyes,
fell upon mine.

Other than general grammar issues I loved this poem. Keep up the good work.
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Review by HelloDalek Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is beautiful.
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