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Review by hatgirl007 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
I don't think you should be too worried about meter. It's like you start off with a rhyme like this stick with it...
"As days went by, I had to escape,
To run away and go back to a place
Where life's image, in an old frame,
Covered with dirt, dust and shame.
And it really works there. But then you change meter to every second line...
"The surprise was not his poor young face
But the scene of an angel in hell
Like he's with misery in a race
And a long story that he has to tell" and it doesn't work - it becomes jerky and irratic. Either stick to one type of meter or do none otherwise it makes the whole poem lose its rhythm. Hope this helps!
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