I really liked this writing. There were some spelling and grammatical mistakes and the text didn't always flow smoothly, but overall it had me hook line and sinker. Your definitions of Harmony and Ottaz had me wanting to whip out a pen and start sketching - very descriptive. I'm not sure if you created the hatari creatures yourself or not simply because I'm a little out of the fantasy link at the moment, but in any case you filled me in quite smoothly. I'd definitely keep my eye on you if I knew you were writing a chapter two and some more cultural background.
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