This is a very good piece of science fiction. I look forward to reading the rest of the story. Everything is well described you can practically see the story unfolding in front of you. A very good read leaves you on the edge of your seat wanting more.
I think this is a good poem but it is a bit wordy if you will. For example the line "For a poet's heart doesn't know love until the abyss of time envelops it,
And the sweet seraph of the sultry sepulcher serenades it." Could have been said "for example" like "For a poet's heart doesn't know love until the abyss of time envelops it,And the sweet angel of the sultry tomb serenades it." And so on, over all a well thought out poem.
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