read your short story Which Man and enjoyed the flow until the abrupt ending? You have a lovely discriptive writing style and a great eye for detail. Be careful when writing in the first person as new writer often tend to end with 'telegraph poles' I I I I I so there are a couple of 'I" that you can discard in your story for example .... some think I use this to hide which is often true mostly using it to see Just a suggestion so keep writing and learning along the way. Grammer is good. Well done Monella
A very interesting piece of work. Well put together and so very true. You showcase your observation of human emotions in this art form. Well done. Monella
Hi ihere
This story started off well. Your character discription was great and believable. I enjoyed the reading and it held my interest all the way through to the end. Sorry but I felt the end was abrupt and bland? Perhaps you could extend it. I like your writing style and the story flowed beautifully apart from the ending. Monella
This is a beautiful story, I loved it. Your characters were believable and the dialogue flowed.
Thank you for the inspiration that comes with the story.
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