Likes: I enjoyed the concept behind the story. It seems like something that would make for a good book. The item is well written and easy to read.
Dislikes: I don't feel that there was enough in this piece to feel like a complete story even for a short.
The Feel: It feels like there is a looming darkness about what is going on around the character. Even with the very little we get to see as a reader, it is obvious there is a lot going on.
Characters: So far I like the main character and want to know more about here, why she is where she is and how the rules of the world work.
More or Less/Where: More for sure. Even as a stand alone piece I want to know more about what she is/does. Why she forgets, why the soldiers don't. All around, more expansion on the story or more entries so that over the course of the stories we learn what is going on in bits and pieces.
I recommend this to people who enjoy war stories from the characters not directly involved.
Likes: Way to follow the guidelines quite so well and still put out quality pieces of work. I was quite impressed with caliber of these pieces despite the restrictions and look foreword to seeing some of your less restricted work. I enjoyed all these pieces. Especially Price of Passion and Love in Namibia. These two pieces particularly flowed quite well.
Dislikes: If I were to really dig I would say that "The Burden of Truth" Was a bit too choppy but that's only by comparison and having realized that it was written after the others.
The Feel: All of the pieces definitely had a carnal feel to them. The only one that lies outside of that would be "The Burden of Truth" which was still driven by a base need to survive and protect despite the moral wrong.
I recommend this to people who enjoy reading pieces of work strict/limiting guidelines but still expect quality results.
These pieces continue to get better and flow smoother as I read down the list. Even at only a hundred words I am left wondering just how much time was put into this piece to get it up to this quality. I suspect the length is decieving on that front.
Even better than the last piece. This one managed to keep a pretty solid flow to it dispite the inability to repeat any word. This piece told a more complete story in one hundered words than some full length pieces I have read over the years. Very nice.
I'm actually quite amazed at how you managed to get the point of the story across dispite the inability to reuse words. Of course the piece is choppy but one can't really expect it to be otherwise under the guidelines of this piece. I look forward to reading the rest of this folder and seeing how well the other pieces worked.
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I enjoyed the concept behind the story. It seems like something that would make for a good book.