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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I haven't read the rest of your story but I'm getting the impression that it may end different than I first thought. At the "What's...wrong?" paragraph I think it takes a different twist than what the reader thinks will happen. That somehow diplomacy and kindness might play a part in defeating Malam.

Good Job!!!

Intriguing.
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