Wow this is great, some really good poetry going on here. Thumbs up! I really like the structure of the poem, it's different, it grips in the reader to continue the poem. I also like the question asked to the readers at the end. Keep on writing!:)
I like the stanza style, you seem really organized in here. 6 stanzas, each four lines. Same structure. However, if you want some advice, I would recommend switching up things and creating more flow in the poems, let each line flow like it wants, feel it in your heart. All I am trying to say is don't be too organized if you don't want to. But overall, this is great. Rock on!
Like this, pretty straightforward and nice. I like the "Yanked" at the end. Gives a pretty sharp turn, makes it feel gruesome. Great poetry! Keep writing.
Honestly, that is so understandable. I do want to have kids but I can wait. I enjoy being my own person and being able to write this without any distractions like kids. We as humans have a lot to think about all the time. I am so glad you could make that decision for yourself!
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