Whaaaaaat!What a story, oh my goodness! I never saw that coming. Your diction is incredible, and the plot twist at the end was brilliant! Keep writing!
Author,
Weird! Wholly crap is all I have to say. I absolutely loved everything about it. The plot, the idea, the diction, the dialogue, everything! Keep writing!
Author,
Oh my God, honestly, this is the best story I've read in a long time. I loved the Led Zep lyrics mixed in with the dialogue and the use of the greatest guitarist who ever lived. Grammar was great, diction was great, everything was great. Keep writing!
-Relaxed Magnet
Author,
I absolutely love this poem, and I personally act the same way as your wife. Your rhyme scheme was brilliant, and I'd like to know how long it took you to come up with such great rhymes. Keep writing!
-Relaxed Magnet
Author,
I truly love this poem, and I feel that many writers, including myself, can strongly relate to this. I feel that emptying the mind with poems like these are healthy. Don't you? Keep writing!
-A Bit of Anarchy
Author,
Hats off to you! I absolutely love this poem, and this would be a good piece to show to a few politicians, if their minds weren't so stuffed with junk. Keep writing!
-A Bit of Anarchy
P.S. Rage against the machine! :)
Author,
I love this poem! I completely know that rebellious feeling that you were feeling and maybe still are feeling. Keep writing!
-A Bit of Anarchy
P.S. Rage against the machine! :)
Author,
Oh my goodness, what a clever ending! I freaked out when I read that. Very well done! I must say I completely agree with this piece. Keep writing!
-A Bit of Anarchy
Author,
Hmm, I find this piece well written, but I cannot say I agree with everything, but that doesn't matter. I hope you continue writing!
Best Wishes,
(Ahem) A Bit of Anarchy
Author,
Oh my goodness, what a great essay! I am in high school as well, and I often get hassled for not standing for the Pledge of Allegiance. You made some amazing points that I would never have thought of. Keep writing!
-A Bit of Anarchy
Author,
I greatly enjoyed this story, and almost the exact same scenario happened to my father when he was younger. I would just be careful where you put your commas. I noticed there were some missing. Keep writing!
-Hazel
Dear Author,
This is such a moving poem! It made me want to cry myself. I love the detail of each and every emotion you're feeling, and it makes poem come alive. Keep writing!
Addison,
This was a very nice story, but it has been done before. I really enjoyed the titles for each chapter, and I normally wouldn't say this, but I liked the size of each chapter. The use of repetition was lovely, but watch your grammar! Keep writing!
-Hazel
Author,
Wow, what an emotional poem! I absolutely loved this poem, and one could write an entire novel based on this. (Maybe I'll give that a try!) I would change nothing about this. Keep writing!
The Scribbler,
What a nice story! I love the dynamic that no matter what kind of kid you are, you'll have the same problems as everyone else. The transition kind of confused me for a moment, so I would label that better. Very nicely done!
Wow, Kactus Berry. Wow. That's all I have to say. This was honestly one of the greatest short stories I have ever read. I often write stories combining the themes of love and insanity, but I have never seen or written about anything like this. What an incredible story! Great job!
-Hazel Hyacinth
Wow, Walker! This was a spine-tingling poem, and I greatly enjoyed every word. Not that anyone looks forward to dying, but it'll be interesting to find out what happens when we die.
-Hazel Hyacinth
Jimi Lennon,
What a groovy poem! I'm sure Jimi Hendrix would greatly appreciate that. Although, I heard that he was dining with Brian Jones, Janis Joplin, and Jim Morrison. This was a wonderful poem of appreciation. "The Jimi Hendrix Experience: Are You Experienced" You sound experienced.
What a great recognition of the sixties! I really liked how detailed this was, and I couldn't help but burst into a grin when you mentioned those musicians. What a great job!
-Hazel Hyacinth (a.k.a. third generation hippie)
Oh my goodness, Tim! How sweet! I absolutely loved your word choice, and I think I learned a few words myself. There are clear differences between poems written from the mind and poems written from the heart, and I definitely think this was written from the heart. Have you showed your girlfriend this? I'm sure she's going to love it. Great job!
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