Thanks for the great blog! I tried doing a blog once and failed to continue and admire those who can do one like you are doing. I did the blog on WordPress and got all kinds of advice telling me that I was doing it wrong and needed Search Engine Optimization and was getting unwelcome suggestions from companies that want to host the site for me, and it wasn't to my liking. I thought blogging would be easier, perhaps I was doing it wrong. I was attracted to your blog on Writing.com because I too am a Christian and wanted to know what you have to say about your journey. I think you have done good work and have good reason to be proud of your work.
I enjoyed your short story about the Cloudman fan. I thought it was very funny--the details on what this man wears were spot on. It looks like you did some research into the things that this man wears and owns.
This man spends too much time in his fantasy world and it shows. I felt sorry for your character, as he sounds lost in his own little world of his own making. I suppose you meant for this to be a warning for the rest of us to get a life, but I couldn't be sure what your intention was. I thought the effective use of first person and not third person brought the reader into the story. Could you imagine how boring it would have been if you were written it in third person? Makes it more immediate and relate-able. Good job! p.s. I hope my review has been helpful. It is my first review.
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