I liked it, it has an air of mystery about it like fantasy dungeons and dragons kinda vibe. Would love to read the finished article once you've written and tweaked it. is this related to something else? or did you just want to write something enticing?
some very poignant imagery there. Not many words but the way you've arranged them still paint images in my mind and I can completely relate. So full of melancholy but also full of creative energy. Keep up the good work! I really enjoyed it and hope to read more.
Interesting beginning, please tell me there's more to come! I enjoyed the build up and I think it has a lot of potential. I would like to know who these men are and how Lucifer has a daughter. Also, why is this daughter modest?
So many questions which makes me want to read on, good job!
awww, heartbroken. I enjoyed this, it was short and sweet but started getting you invested in the characters. Would be interested to see whether there's any follow up to this, seems like a really good beginning for the reader to see how Alex grows and changes and eventually becomes the man he wants to be. Sad that Jeremy dies :(
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