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Review by George Hudoba Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (3.0)
Are you using commas for marking the end of sentences? Or an entire paragraph meant to be a sentence? I've learned that people like simpler sentences... It's difficult to read due to the commas versus end of sentence.
But story wise it's interesting. Lots of imagination.
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Review by George Hudoba Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I was lost in the actual story and not grammar wise, but I sympathize with you. Sometimes I feel the same... And then again If I get into a line of people, suddenly another line pops up from another angle and everybody looks at me, like why are you standing there, don't you see WE ARE THE LINE?
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Review by George Hudoba Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Nice!
Good flow, great storytelling.
Good details were it matters...
I like the ending too, albeit I was sure it would be something hilarious. I can tell this isn't your first and definitely not the last!
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