There aren't many stories that show a good realism within compassion, especially when pertaining to love. The author here seems like they themselves have suffered or endured difficulties in their lives with love and perhaps, is portreying that out to the world as either and outreach of what may be help, or they are offering help to others through their own knowledge and experience. Great Story! Please keep sharing!
This to me was a good story, although simple, it had good lessons in it to teach. The author also presented the story with a hint of humor as well as drama and suspense. The main things that a good story needs to not be repetitive and redundant.
Also, the use of quotations was very good in the speech of the characters, and spelling was correct along with grammer.
If I were to suggest anything constructive as a reader, it would be the spacing and format. It seems like a simple story may look a little better if it weren't double spaced, and more closer to a paragraph body form. But thats just my style I guess. Great job though! Please keep sharing!
In my opinion, this was a great story. It had everything a story needs. There was fear, compassion, realism, like I could visualize exactly what the author was describing. Another feature I liked a lot, was that the author described every small relenting detail down to the texture and image of what it felt like, smelled like or looked like. Great story. Please keep sharing.
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