I liked the theme running throughout. It can be so hard to review poetry because its so unique to the writer, so i'll just stick to the technical stuff. The flow was good, you didn't muddle words and break the rhythm, so it makes for smooth read. I especially liked the opening lines, "with ample air left, a breath bereft of breath."
I liked the theme of the poem, and the simple direct language. The second to last paragraph (when you thought i wasnt looking I learned most of lifes lessons...) got a little bit muddled, and it kind of broke the flow of the poem. It happened to a lesser degree a couple times but that was the most notable. Otherwise i liked it.
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