I liked this piece alot! It had some great comparisons in there and it was very true. It reads very well because you have good imagery in here. A reader can picture these things easily, and that's what makes a good writer. For the readers to be able to see the images, understand them, and relate to them.
Keep up the good work!
~*~Joy Heartland~*~
Very nice, sounds like an interesting day doesn't it? I liked the imagery, it would be good if you also included some characterization though. Was this really a diary entry? And if so, why wasn't this written in the first person tense? I liked it though, definatly the best writing I read today! Keep up the good work!
~*~Joy Heartland~*~
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