In all, a very good one. Didn't stop till i ran through it.
(“You’re client,” retorted Flanders angrily, “is the lead suspect in an investigation. He’s not going anywhere.” your and not 'you're). sure it was a typo though.
..however, i found s few misapplied tenses: "They usually come (came) alone to the prey's lair and mauled it." (i think the train of tenses in that paragraph should have been followed here as well); and, "especially in the silence of the forest where even the smallest of sounds get (got) magnified many times (same as previous).
the above regardless, compelling story.
i shall look forward to the rest of it.
regards,
Ethan.
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