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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi there *Smile*

Nice thoughtful poem, I really enjoyed it.

If I may suggest; for ease of reading your poem, letting its natural rhythm flow: How about using some spacing? For example:

Don't know how to feel;
time is change, change is real.
Movement forward or backwards in your mind,
still can not stop time.
Become each second shout let my voice be herd.
Endless possibility's of random words,
the way I fit them together belongs to me.
Not the words themselves you see,
what would I do without them .....
Loss of the tools I use to express my love for him.

Hope you find my suggestion helpful.

All the best and happy writing.

Gnowee
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