Over all, I definatly enjoyed this read. I couldn't find any obvious grammatic or spelling errors, and thought it was very well thought out and written. However, I'm a little confused about the young girl's story. I know she died too, but I'm not sure what relevance she had to the man. Was she just showing him the way? Also, was it the same men that killed her father that also took Emily away from him?? Sorry if I missed something along the way, but I read it through twice and still got a little lost at that part.
Also, the title and discription were a little vauge and misleading to the overall plot of the story.
But, overall it was definatly something worth reading, and I'd read it again.
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This is really good. I can completely feel your pain in this, its very real.
And I have no problem with your grammar and spelling, cleaning it up too much probally owuld have taken the raw truth out of it, which is one of the things I liked so much about it.
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