It's very fun that you are writing about reality and fantasy. I like also that even in the fantasy you show that you think the relationship with henry wouldn't work.
nice job, you know i can relate :)
I could really feel the warmth in this poem. made me smile.
Read this as this is someone you are in love with but not in a relationship with, or you are far apart from them.
When I started reading I got the impression I was reading a teens monologue, so I was quite surprised that it turned a bit domestic violence. Was wondering maybe if you changed your mind on the storyline halfway through. Or perhaps you didn't know how to make the start stronger. But I connected with the poem non the less.
Good job,
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