The landing part was hilarious. " I finally landed. Ok, I actually crashed landed in a tree, but that counts as a superb" I found that part hilarious. Great job on the descriptions, and also I love how you left us guessing if she saw the wings. Most quthors would have probably made them blurt out that that person has wings or made the persons mouth be gaping it open, but you made it a lot less obvious than that so I am definitely going to have to keep reading. Great job.
That was good. I loved the excitement that you introduced right off in the beginning. I did not see any typos. The adjectives were used well with how it gave the characters expressions and described how they felt. I found this actually quite entertaining for such a small story so I rate you 5 stars. Good job.
It was all great, I was just confused with what was happening because with the wings popping out in the dream, I honestly at first thought the wings were just in the dream and not real. Other than that it was great so 4.5 stars.
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