This didn't really produce the imagery in my mind at all. It didn't make me feel anything or connected to this story. It personified winter in a couple of lines but others it broke the spell of personification. I started out thinking it was describing winter as we view it solely how it is right on the nose, but then it personified it. I think that's why I couldn't connect. It didn't stay to the theme of the title or some of the lines.
I really liked the start of it, excellent hook! I started to loose interest in it within the 2nd and 3rd paragraph. I think it was because there were so many descriptive words almost too many that it actually took me out of the reality and the story I was trying to figure out what you could mean. Less descriptive filler words and paint the picture simpler so I can still stay within the story and imagine it without having to stop and take in all the words thrown at me.
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