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Review by Cole Butler Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
The perfect depiction of borderline personality ex- girlfriend. I like the differences between the two women concerning the main character. One that has the same interests as him and one that clearly doesn't. I also like that you put Guy in a colorful sea of people. He is a newly single man and now has many many options.

i don't know what the intention was for saying that there were immigrants everywhere, but this was my interpretation. Anyways, The new girl is more his type, assuming he is a natural and native Londoner just like her and that Celia was different, because she is cut from a more Latin based cloth. Maybe I am stretching things a bit but that is what I inferred from the information given. Maybe you could clarify

I like the sassy nature of the London beauty. I like that she either didn't care that he was speaking to his ex, or that she was smart enough to know that his relationship with Celia was over and "would soon replace" the old companion.

The play on old companion double meaning is very clever and i think it worked very well here.

I enjoyed the read!


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Review by Cole Butler Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I think this poem was well done. Nice structure and imagery.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I really like this piece. The flow works well, the structure is good. I noticed that you used any type of punctuation once. I think, and this is just mu opinion that you can use commas to separate "my love" from everything else since you are referring to someone. I think that will just as a little more punch. I enjoyed reading *Smile*
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Review by Cole Butler Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love the flow of this poem. I like the devices used for time. The simple ticking of a clock that bridges and elapses the time its has taken for the world to evolve into a place the sustains life, only for it to be destroyed by the negligence and lack of care by the "inheritors of the earth". I like the places where you chose to repeat, I think it was effectively. I also like the way that you ended the poem, where time stops and is thus the end of the world. Very well done.


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