Pretty interesting, I think you could have done without the capitalisation on the THING and ONE to preserve the tension of the moment described. Also, your punctuation seems a little inconsistent, as though you're changing the kind of flow you use in sentences from one line to the next. Otherwise, it's a nice little piece about nostalgia.
Very good read, I love the contrasting and juxtaposition of Death's job with the opinions and views of the survivors to what he is doing, and Amal's role in making it apparent through dialogue where I originally expected him to just be a plot device.
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