The point of view that you have chosen for this story definitely adds intensity to the situation. It made me feel as if it could be me in the bath tub waiting to die. I also like the way you utilized multiple senses to describe the setting. This made the story even more believable. The only thing I can say is please continue the story because i enjoyed what I read.
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