I really enjoyed this short dialogue. It speaks on something that all humans should have-good intentions. You explain to the reader that if they do good, that they will be rewarded- at least that's what I took away. Your punctuation is perfect and the description paints a good picture; however, I would like to know just a little bit more about how Jared looks. You seem to be an awesome writer. Keep it up.
-Will
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