Very neat. I like the way it describes what pain is compared to a runner, like an extended metaphor. (I'm learned this in English class, so I hope I fully understand what a extended metaphor is.) The description of what a runner does before the race starts is intersting. This is all for now.
This is really neat. Lots of details, enough to let me get a visuall idea to what the poem wants you to picture. In the first verse, I picture the pen. In the second, I picture a flashback compared to the ocean. In the third, I visulize the solace. Great writings, and keep it up.
This story is really neat. There's a lot of details in the conversation which, if observed closly, than You could guess the characteristics about the charaters talking to each other. I think the turning point of the story was when Marlyn realized her mother was in trouble. Then she showed courage and bravery went to China to take care of her mom. I love that description in the end.
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