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Review of Ch.1 - Genesis  Open in new Window.
Review by Micheal Carter Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
As some may say, the story has some good bones. It is hard to read at the beginning, words thrown in seeming just to show that you have an extensive vocabulary, especially when further into the story you use less but tell more. My recommendation is something I read in Stephen King's "On Writing". Always try to take out around 10% from the rough draft and lose as many adverbs as possible. Otherwise, the story is very appealing and the second half draws in the reader, they just have to make it to that point.
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