At first it seemed a simple 'boy meets girl' story but every time I thought I knew where it was going it delightfully twisted!
Excellent, smooth progress of the story line - that dialogue was key and not bogged down by any description that wasn't necessary. The buildup to the conclusion was, as I said, smooth and very well done!
For me, the conclusion was a tad too quick considering the set pace of the story. I would have drawn it out a bit more using Rogan's efforts to try escaping with Becca to soften the abruptness of the ending. Logically Rogan would not have known that he couldn't escape once he saw Becca could - it would be natural for him to try.
Good job!
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