Wow! First of all, your use of iambic pentameter makes this poem remarkably easy to read. The flow feels effortless. It is amazing that in a poem of such short length that your are able to craft the a clear image of this woman. A particularly revealing line is "Her luminescence rivaled the stars' white" (no pun intended). Also, the news of her disease and death comes as quickly as I'm sure you intended. Her death is as startling to me as to the people who admired her.
I have only a small suggestion for improvement, and that is to find a more descriptive word than "better" in line 4. I'm not sure what it means to be "better than a gem." I am only left wondering, better in what way(s)? Other than that very small exception, I thoroughly enjoyed this piece, and your ease with the language made it like a breath of fresh air to read.
Good work!
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