I loved the story over all. It was entrancing, well written, the kind of thing you enjoy reading. The only reason I'm giving you tips is so your writing can improve even more. Sometimes your descriptions were not large enough. I also fell like the characters emotions weren't explored deeply enough.
Wow. That hit me like a wave. First of all, the rhymes were used extraordinarily well. They alone made me respect and sympathize with your poem. Secondly, the message behind it was clear and beautiful. Sometimes, when we reveal our emotions, the world-or at least we feel like the world- doens't care. Thank you for writing this. No criticisms, and I say that because you shouldn't change one word.
Wow. The idea is a bit haunting and strange. Humanizing Satan is not something easy to do, not just for societal reasons but also because its just hard to write. Although there were grammar and sentence structure issues that distracted me from your point, overall it was well written and fun to read.
Well written with a great message. While I enjoyed the story I think it could have been better without the ending, which was a bit cliche. The boy's personality was definitely the highlight of the story, and it made up for any small mistakes.
The ending feels less like clever and more like forced. I liked the idea, but unless you can find a way to make the story more intriguing, its not really enjoyable.
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