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Review by DemonGod18 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
You ruined it. You f***ing ruined it by turning it into a vore story. Not only that, but you contradicted yourself after having Gohan say he’d protect the innocent but then he immediately eats his own mother. How about, instead of going to a weight gain interactive story, go to one that’s about vore and write a story there.
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Review by DemonGod18 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I'm already invested in this story. I already like the way this story is starting out. It's making me curious as to how exactly Tails is going to be turned into a slob. Tails is one of those characters that's always one step ahead of everyone, so it'll be a treat to see how this is going to go down.
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Review by DemonGod18 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
An interesting way to start a weight gain story. I like the reason Ash's mom wants him to eat more. Ash has always been one of those characters I liked to see gain any kind of weight. I can only imagine how this can go. I really want to see more chapters added to this interactive.
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