I love the lofty nature of your work. Seems happy and free within. I can feel the life of the snowflake. I think a bit more personification of the snowflake would be nice. Give it more life and a essences of its own. But that is jst my humble opinion.
I think it is a great portion of a story. I am not sure if it is a story in making or not, or if it is a completed piece, but I want more!! But you were able to utilize dialogue to its full advantage. I am often discouraged by people and their writing skills when it comes to dialogue. But you have clearly outlined who is speaking. Well done!
I really enjoy this piece. What I take from it is about a girl trying to be something and capture beauty, but since she feels ugly on the inside, this is no easy task to accomplish. I have tragically seen many girls try to hide themselves behind veils and makeup.
But this pieces remains an excellent. I like when someone reads a piece and they can pull their own meaning from it and make it relivant to their. At that point writing is no longer writin - It is Art!
Your paint brush has crafted a great piece, and I applaud you!
This is quite good and it reminds me of a piece I wrote called "Forget not the Treachery." It is grea to see someone sending their love out to someone that has left to defend our nation. I know first hand how it can be to be overseas and away from everything and everyone you love.
This hit chords with me. the piece is quite good. I cannot help but think how many times I have tried to make a firiend into a lover. i have tried the reverse too. But that is just too much to do do at times. Tends to be the people that love the other person the most is the one overlooked in most instances. Funny how the heart seeks out people that are just not going to come around to you.
Great piece all and all. I liked it a lot!! A great little story of how an angel sat atop the christmas tree all alone and scared. But her hero came along to her rescue and she was not alone after all. I can relate to this piece quite a bit. Us toy soldiers often try to rescue our angels.
I find this piece to be intriguing and very well crafted. I love how you used rhymes within the same line. Many poets cannot pull that off very well but you did it nicely. "When I see mine own,
Entangled and strangled in withered branches," is what i notice most. It gives great life and paint great imagery!!
This is quite an amazing piece. It reminds me of one of my pieces I did named "Much To Late So Soon" It has a similar message, although you took a way different approach. It sounds like the hopelessness we all feel sometimes with those we loveand cherish.
Quite an extraordinary piece. I love how you made the words form the shape of a christmas tree. That was quite an interesting way to incorporate ASCII artwork into your writing. I like also how you also included different color text to make it look as though it had ornimates. Great all around!
Lost love is a tremendous burden that we must face. No wonder it is something that is so common for us to write about as authors.
I get the feeling you would of done anything for this one person. Indeed I have been there. I think we all have. Very touching piece that i can feel that you are actually spilling your own heart and emotions inot this piece. Your soul spilt on to the pages.
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